It started to be an ordinary day, just a simple Saturday. My friends and I were going to a friend's house because of her birthday, but that was until 9PM. So, I didn't do anything for the day, just eat all day watching sports and movies. I told Carlos to come over to my house to play fifa, and so that we could go together to Susy's house. Carlos's mother took us to Susy's house and when we arrived German was only guy there, so now we were three. After a few minutes, Carlos arrived and then we decided to go to te park because we were very few guys in there. Then, we went back again to the house to see if any other friend had arrived. No one was there but we received a group message in whatsapp that three of our friends were arriving, but at the park so we went again there. Both Carlos and Carlos went running to the park, but German told me to go with him in his Cherokee. We picked up the guys and because we didn't all fit in the truck, two of our friends went hanging of the ceiling. German told them not to do it, but they didn't care. In one part of the neighborhood, there was a straight and German decided to accelerate until the point in which we almost travel back in time. We were all laughing because the guys who were hanging, were screaming and begging German to stop.
The rest is history.
Luis- What is history about this post?
ResponderBorrarI think that you do a great job describing the situation, but remember that you need to include some sort of SO WHAT. Why do I care about this? Did anything in particular happen? What do you want your audience to take away from this? I think it could work as a simple reminder to always have fun and enjoy the time with your friends. Also, you could definitely include some dialogue in this post so that readers understand your characters- maybe when you say that they were begging and screaming you could give examples of what they were saying. Anyway, this is a solid post, it just needs a little work. I'm excited to see the final product. Thanks for sharing! :)
I like how you described, but maybe you could have put some dialogue
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